Here we are, coming up to the last day in June, easing into a holiday weekend in Canada (Happy 150th Birthday!) and Independence Day in the USA. But before we get to those celebrations, let’s take a moment to read some Friday Fictioneer stories. If you would like more info on this weekly tradition please click Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s name to visit our hosts site.
Today’s photo prompt is brought to us by the esteemed and accomplished Rochelle. Remember this photo is the property of the photographer and shouldn’t be used for any purpose without express permission.
Now my 100 word story –
His emails became more frequent. They played with Valerie’s heartstrings, turning her inside out. Her mother didn’t understand why she had to go, why she chose to leave her well-tuned life. “You’re trying to grasp smoke,” she scolded.
In Naples, Valerie wove her way down sun dappled cobblestone streets, questioning her decision at every turn. “You don’t know him,” echoed in her ears. Her hesitant knock on a battered wooden door was answered by a man Valerie had never met. He gazed at her with heartbreakingly familiar eyes. Valerie whispered what she had longed to say all her life, “Papa.”
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Cheers,
Cindy
I wonder if her mother was right. I believe you think she wasn’t, but hey, you’re only the author
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Does that mean I should know where the story is going? 🙂 Thanks for dropping by Neil.
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Great take on the prompt. Well done.
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Thanks Iain, glad you liked it.
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The last line caught me delightfully off-guard. Perhaps he’s changed. Maybe he no longer wants to disappear like smoke. Well penned.
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Thank you Alicia.
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This is awesomely-awesome , Cindy. The girl’s emotions, so well captured. The last line moved me to tears.
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Thank you so much Moon.
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I was not expecting that. Very interesting story.
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Thanks for the compliment. Glad you dropped by.
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A hurt mother, a daughter who needs her dad, and a man who missed out on so much. Great story.
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Thanks so much. You summed it up perfectly.
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such a wonderful twist. hopefully, she made the right decision.
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I hope so. Thanks for dropping by.
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I was not expecting that turn! And, the way I see it, if you don’t try, you’ll never know…
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Great outlook!
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Although she had never met him, clearly she knew him. I think that’s a happy ending!
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I think so. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Keith, I read your beautiful poem. For some reason I have never been able to figure out how to leave a comment. There have been many times I wanted to comment but could get my link to work.
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I can leave comments only because I have a Google accoumt. Maybe that’s what you have to do — though getting replies is another story. 😑
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Dear Cindy,
I love the misdirect here. It sounds like there’s hope for Valerie and her father. Nicely written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Glad you like the misdirect, sometimes I worry that people will feel cheated.
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I love the leap of faith and the way you made me think she was making a huge mistake until the very last moment. Brilliant! :o)
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Thank for such a generous complement.
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Awww I love your take on the photo prompt. You weaved a heartwarming tale.
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Jade, thanks for dropping by and leaving such a kind comment.
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Well done. It’s quite an adventure to meet a parent you’ve never laid eyes on before — and then sit and listen to “their side.”
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Glad you dropped by Christine. As you said that would be quite an adventure. Do ghosts ever live up to your expectations.
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I worked with a man in his thirties who confided one day that he’d been adopted. He said, “If I ever find my birth mother I’m going to spit in her face.”
I told him, “You don’t at all know the circumstances around your birth. Better wait until you do.” Thankfully our daughter has never felt like he did.
I think often the abandoned child — especially if they vaguely remember — has a pretty low opinion of the absent parent. Sometimes the child’s pleasantly surprised and much more sympathetic once he hears the truth. And sometimes not. But usually they realize the picture’s much bigger than “He/She didn’t want me.”
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Sadly true.
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Ooh, so many ways this could go. I have my fingers crossed. Nice one!
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Thanks so much.
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Cindy, this is a wonderful story! Excellent! I can not imagine having never been around my father. He was such a kind man and role model. Well done! Nan
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I agree, my father was the same. Perhaps that is why we feel stories like this – we know what they are missing.
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This one tugged at my heartstrings too. I’m rooting for a happy ending.
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I agree, I am just not sure what it is. Thanks for dropping by.
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Oh yes, great little tale. The ending caught me by surprise (and tears to my eyes).
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Thanks Patrick, so glad it moved you.
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I think this is terrific with a great twist.
And I have been known to do that myself on occasion.
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How dastardly.
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Very well done. I was sure it was probably someone she’d met over the internet and she wasn’t heeding caution. But the twist, this was a very good twist.
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Thanks so much Sascha, so glad you liked it.
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Ooh this one tugged at my heart strings! Great mis-direct and touching story.
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Thank Clare, I appreciate such nice comments.
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You led me to thinking this was going to turn out completely different and not for the better ether. Great twist at the end, I hope she gets on with her new found father
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Thanks for the compliment, so glad this worked.
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Well, I say don’t condemn the man without hearing what he has to say. Good on Valerie.
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Thanks for dropping by and leaving comment.
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This is a lovely story with a great twist at the end. Good writing, Cindy. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thank you Suzanne. I appreciate the kind comment.
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I absolutely adored this. I was not expecting that ending and it was so touching. Well done!
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Amie, I a so glad this story moved you. Thanks for dropping by and taking the time to comment.
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